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Incentive to write a better one? Maybe, I dunno, just maybe consider tusche aping it and starting over?
Orthoscopic Platypus. Everybody else is dead wrong.
Overpowered
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But aquarium gravel is tough and gritty! If your novel is a mystery, I think that was a great compliment. Wait a second...it's also really disgusting and slimy and smells like dead fish...
Still better than twilight.
29- your breath? ---waits for highly possible offended/mean retorts aimed to insult back... By anyone...---
OP- wow. If you where a girl and lived in ( place that I won't describe), you could have been a teacher of mine One thing is different about hers from yours: her friends liked it. Sorry, OP.
You mean the song?
That's probably the best and your only chance at an honest critique.
That sounds like a poor excuse for critique. Critiques are typically detailed and specific, as well as analytical. Comparing something to aquarium gravel when asked for a critique is just mean and not at all honest.
Did they at least point out that you can't properly construct a sentence? Maybe try one that doesn't end with a preposition.
They're probably just jealous. Have faith in yourself OP! If it's actually not very good, just change it, but don't give up
No, they're being good friends and not lying to OP.
I think good friends would have worded it better... They were kinda being dicks. GOOD friends wouldn't compare it to aquarium gravel, they would tell OP it needs work, or that they don't think being an author is OP's thing. The way they put it was just rude and pretty ignorant in my opinion
I too have written a book. It's bloody hard work, but wow what a total buzz writing is! I loved writing my book!! Problem is - getting it published. That's even harder!! I think you should maybe get an agent to look it over. Your friends comments were not very helpful. Don't give up!!
Aquarium gravel? Sniffing boot polish? In that case, I suggest you write erotic literature instead..
Idk why people are thumbing you down... I dont smoke weed oftenly but people thumbing you down have only heard of bad affects of weed ... Thats probably what it is.... I have smoked weed like three times so i cant really say much.... But i do know weed is bad for you but its not horrible... People need to calm down about it...
Worked for Lady GaGa..... Not.
25- No need for so many periods.
No weed argument?
25 - Drugs are bad. Mkay? Not too difficult to understand that ******* simple logic. Some people don't mind them, some people can't abide them. I don't mind them, but I stay the **** away from people that use them. They are bad, bad people and as Uncle Touchy always said, bad people do more then just "touch".
And your proper use of spelling and grammar attests to that, 25. Form a coherent argument, then get back to us.
Can someone tell me where in this galaxy 'oftenly' is a word? I'm dying to know.
43, not all drug users are bad people. Some ate sad looking for happiness and a lot are just regular people who delve into that side of the world. I don't use drugs, but I think it's very stereotypical to say they're all bad people.
Shannon - CryMore was speaking in hyperbole. Can we PLEASE not start another weed war? I'm still fighting the same war from last week with some asshat stoner over PMs. I just done have the energy.
Lol omg you guys have nothing to say so you correct shit you understand... I use dots because i just dont like commas... If you understand my point then dont correct me ... You are all just pathetic nazis that think they are the shit because they can spell and be grammaticly correct all the time... Unless im writing an essay i dont give three ***** how i write
Oh oh oh I want a hissy fit from Alan!! PLEEEAAAASE?? Oh Siickman, PLEASE keep writing like a half-witted nincompoop so Alan will throw a fit! Oh please say you will!
Lol, commas and ellipses (or dots, whatever) do not fulfill the same grammatical role. Ellipses are used for an omission of a word or section of writing, or used to understand a continuation of thought.
Both may make you pause, but only one of them makes us pause and say, "The way that guy writes makes him look like a dumbass."
All because you don't like commas does not mean you can't use just ONE period. You know, end a sentence normally.
............... You are all dumb asses ........................... Like i cant even explain the intensity of all your stupidity ,,,,, im sorry i dont use commas,,,, im sorry i dont live to please you,,,, but i honestly believe you have turned this small case of me being lazy and hating the comma,,, to a ******* lesson ,,,, move on with your life but go see a doctor and take that stick out of all your asses ... Uptight snobby bitches who call out people for fun.... What a shame
Gentle ribbing? I have like 30 people fighting me. Excuse my rudeness but, i just had enough already. I think i might start purposely write like an illiterate son of a bitch just piss people off. Only thing is i wont fight with people about it so i dont cause problems, i just want to see how many people have a stick up their ass. :)
And your stupid. It's sciencetificly proven weed is not harmful to you body. Okay retard check up on your facts. I've never smoked weed but some of my family does. BECAUSE THEY HAVE GLAUCOMA! So not all people who smoke weed are bad people
25 what are the bad effects of weed physically I'd like to know?
Hey, according to 94 it's 'sciencetificly proven' that you don't have to smoke weed or be an 'asshat stoner' to make a blundering fool of yourself, online or otherwise. I know plenty of idiots who smoke, true. But some of the most brilliantly hilariously creative people I know also smoke. The reality is that it's not 'good or bad'. It depends on the user. I'm not going to speak for any one side; I can't advocate inhaling anything into your lungs other than air. Here's a chance to grow as a person: do some research, and make an educated decision for yourself. And Alan, Henry Rollins is a hot bitch - and so are you!
"Your stupid" Lol...
PrincessPesa - how much research have you actually done on it? Really, how much? Why don't you and forever_born go look at some medical journals about the subject. Specifically read how it has NEVER been "scientifically proven" to be harmless, as forever_born idiotically claimed. In fact, it's quite the opposite: do bronchitis, membranous glonerulonephritis, coronary vasospasm, emphysema, depression, spontaneous pneumothorax, and anxiety sound harmless to you? Go look them up. YES IT HAS SOME MILD BENEFITS, but it's not as harmless as the pot advocates want you to believe.
I was only jesting in the second half of my comment... *sniffle*
Vasilisa - You're absolutely correct. I get a bit peeved when people make completely ludicrous statements.
Doc, I have have been misunderstood. I never claimed any of the specific benefits or ills that may result from using marijuana. Maybe it's because I said it's not "good or bad"? I meant that the issue clearly isn't black or white, based on all evidence available. I'm not here to demonize or laud marijuana or anyone else's opinion on the matter. I'm not fighting any weed war, for or against it. My point is that judging a person based on whether or not they use marijuana is closed minded. (Please, no diatribes about legality or health issues). There is no true measure of pot's cultural impact. Many well-loved and quite popular artists have been "pot advocates" at one time or have claimed its benefits in their creative endeavors. There are also many who smoke themselves into oblivion. My comment about research has nothing to do with my own opinions and was not intended to argue anything specific. I was just encouraging people to use their own brains and learn about what they so vehemently defend or oppose.
Okay, I was also using 94 as an example. She doesn't smoke, but her post is a mess- and I was making fun of her saying pot's harmlessness is "sciencetificly proven". So, sorry for all the words but I felt I needed to clarify.
Pretty butterfly! Look at it flyi-- ooh! Shiny thing!
That's not critiquing. That's just being rude.
they crossed the line between constructive criticism and being an asshole
soooo I'm guessing nobody else is gonna get to see this masterpiece for a while...
I'm actually bummed by that!
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But aquarium gravel is tough and gritty! If your novel is a mystery, I think that was a great compliment. Wait a second...it's also really disgusting and slimy and smells like dead fish...
Aquarium gravel? Sniffing boot polish? In that case, I suggest you write erotic literature instead..